Thursday, March 4, 2010

Flash 55 Friday - Shirt Tales

This week's Flash 55, is a 2fer readers choice. I have taken one picture and developed two 55's for it. My wife suggested to name them, "Shirt Tales". I am interested in which story you liked best.

Clothed in Love
The morning air, so fresh and clean;
a day spent hanging out together, just the two of them.
Warm gentle breezes swirling to and fro;
neither afraid of being carried away in the moment.
He was thankful to touch something soft with his outstretched arms.
She was relieved it wasn't just another stuffed shirt experience!

Dirty Laundry

It wasn't their dirty little secret any longer.
Now it was out in the open for all to see.
He tried to take her into his arms.
Reluctantly she pulled away.
Was she hanging him out to dry?
Had he been using the same old line?
Maybe, she didn't want to be pinned down anymore.

Friday Flash 55 is a fifty-five word story posted every Friday. To join in the fun, create and write any story you like in 55 words; no more, no less. Using this link, tell Mr. Knowitall a.k.a. the G-Man, by leaving a comment on his own Flash 55 post.


Sherry said...

I liked the second one better - the play on words was awesome! I bet that's your favorite too!

G-Man said...

Are these the Yin and Yan of 55's?
They BOTH Rocked Peter.
See how inspiring Fridays AND Flapping shirts can be?
Thank you so much for these quality contributions, and have a Kick Ass Week-End....G

Donnetta Lee said...

These are priceless! I can't figure out which one I like better. Maybe the second one. But both are neat. Your wife had a good idea. She knows your talent! Clever. D

Brian Miller said...

ha. i loved them both...gave me warm smiles indeed. great 55s.

mine is up!

Susan said...

I like the second one a whole lot! Great 55.
I’m up right HERE

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

I like BOTH.
Shirts in love. WOW



jinksy said...

Second one for me too, though the first is cute. Shirt Tails is the perfect title for either. Good thinking, Bat Man - or Bat Man's missus!

Peter Stone said...

The second one is awesome, the double layers of meaning in every line give it so much depth. Well done.

SandyCarlson said...

These are great--two aspects of a relationship, perhaps after and before or before and after, now and then or then again. So real.

otin said...

I do believe that the second one was my favorite of the two. Very clever with the pinned down!

Monkey Man said...

Loved them both. My 55 is here .

Alicia said...

First of all, I love the photo. And second, they're both great. And very clever. Love it.

Here's mine.

Alice Audrey said...

I like them both, but differently. Clothed in Love made me smile. Dirty Laundry made me sad.

Mama Zen said...

I like the first one!

PattiKen said...

Wow, so hard to choose. If forced to choose, I guess I'd say the second. But they are both excellent!

Nessa said...

I liked them both. It's hard to choose one over the other as they are very different.

Flash 55 - Earthquake

One Single Impression - Running

jabblog said...

Well done with your two takes - impresssive! I liked both but the first was my favourite - it's the romantic in me;-)

Anonymous said...

They're both so GOOD! I can't decide which I like better- so I pick both. :)

The photo is a beautiful prompt.

Anonymous said...

It is hard to pick on this. They are both excellent. But I sorta liked two a little better. They both rocked though. Have a great Friday :)

Vodka Logic said...

I liked the first one.. seemed sweet

Prayer Girl said...

Loved "them". I adored both of 55s and refuse to choose between them. Wonderful writing.


Larry said...

I choose number one cause I like romance the second one was sad to me and have never liked sadness between two people or at least that is the way I read it. loved em both I didn't know we could do twofers so I learned something also.I'm posted for friday flash 55also just follow the link below.

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KB said...

The second one made me laugh and that's just what I needed today. Thank you.

Charlie said...

Holy cow, I'm late to the party!

I agree with the folk that both stories are very good, but I like the first one better--there is a touch of whimsy about it.

Akannie said...

LOL...these were both delightful, Buzz....thanks for sharing them.

Anonymous said...

I liked the first. It sounds to me like real love, two people stitched tight at the heart.

järnebrand said...

The first one is cuter, the second one is funnier... They are both very good and the picture is great! Hanging out to dry... Not another stuffed shirt... :) All smiles now. Thank you. /Jo.

Buzzard said...

Thank you everyone for your thoughts about your favorite.

Isn't it funny how you can take the same picture and find two opposite meanings.

They say a picture is worth a thousand words. This one was worth 110!

Lulda Casadaga said...

Very clever duo 55's! I think someone should start a 100 word Sunday... :)
Loved them both...come by and visit my blog sometime.
p.s G-man it's Yin and Yang!! :P